[drupal-docs] July Drupal Newsletter - FINAL DRAFT

[Andrew Hoppin]

Great work Robin.  I know how much work it takes to pull this much 
content together.   There are a few minor grammatical errors in some 
places and I've made suggested edits for those below...

>   The important news this month is out large scale outage lasting over
> 3 days which caused a severe disruption in the Drupal services

What do you mean by "Drupal services"-- are we just talking about 
Drupal.org, or something else also?

> <http://drupal.org/node/26545>.  We are happy to say we are back on
> track now, and with even more Services on the horizon!

"Services" shouldn't be capitalized.  What are the new "services" we're 
talking about here?   More information resources on Drupal
org?

>   It appears our downtime was a blessing in disguise; raising over
> $10,000 USD in addition to in-kind donations of services and servers,
> setting up a long term hosting plan with OSL
> <http://drupal.org/node/26707> and getting server and service
> donations!

the clause above after the semi-colon has a grammatical problem I 
think-- the edit I suggested earlier this week was:
"We raised over $10,000 USD in addition to in-kind donations of 
services and servers, and we set up a long term hosting plan for 
Drupal.org with OSL <http://drupal.org/node/26707>!"

> Drupal Sightings – Let's find out new adopters to the joys of Drupal!

grammatical problem above again-- I'd suggest "Showcasing some of the 
best new Drupal sites around the world!"

> Join us at the O'Reilly Open-Source Conference 2005 to learn about
> Drupal. For those who are not going to attend OSCON itself, we are
> organizing a free, offsite Drupal conference at Portland State
> University which we are calling Portland 2005 Drupal Conference
> DrupalConUSA will be in 2 parts. Part 1 (informational, for users and

Is it being called "Portland 2005 Drupal Conference" or "DrupalConUSA"? 
   It's not clear to me.   Also there needs to be a period between 
"Conference" and "DrupalConUSA"-- it's a new sentence, yes?

>   ---------------------------
>   DRUPAL DEVELOPMENT QUICKIES
>   ---------------------------
>
> This month the quickies are shorter than usual, it is summer after all
> and we had a very long outage and alas security problems to tackle.

Minor grammatical issue above-- I'd suggest something like:
"This month the quickies are shorter than usual, thanks to the fact 
that it IS summer after all, and that we contended this month with a 
long outage on Drupal.org and, alas, security problems as well.

> chx has changed the way Drupal is initialized. It's much easier now to
> write supplemental scripts or using parts of Drupal in another app
> just because you like some part of API. http://drupal.org/node/18213

Slight problem above, and I'm not sure if I understand exactly your 
meaning, but does this below edit still capture your meaning?  I'd 
suggest:
"chx has changed the way Drupal is initialized. It's much easier now to 
write supplemental scripts or to use parts of Drupal in another 
application that has an API that you want to use."

> Each passing month finds us with more great Drupal powered websites to
> share with you, and this month, we'd like to point out some of these
> sites for you enjoyment.

should be no comma after "month" and "you" should be "your"

> Gwenview <http://gwenview.sourceforge.net/>
> Gwenview is "a fast and easy to use image viewer for KDE".  They use
> Drupal nicely for the main site and to provide powerful features to
> their users.
>
> Mr PHP <http://mrphp.com.au/>
> Mr PHP has used Drupal to power its open source and commercial
> services and forums.  As a bonus, they've created a non-standard home
> layout.
>
> Threadwatch <http://www.threadwatch.org/>
> Threadwatch is "a community website focused on Internet marketing and
> related technologies".  They have used Drupal to create a rich
> Slashdot style blogging site.
>
> Drupal Powered Lives
> Of course, we'd like to see more Drupal sightings, so why not be one
> yourself?  That's what this Cafepress site wants to happen, so why not
> give in to a shirt (or coat, or mug...)
> <http://www.cafepress.com/drupalpowered>

I'd suggest: "Of course, we'd like to see more Drupal sightings, so why 
not be a Drupal sighting yourself?  This CafePress store can get you 
started with a Drupal shirt, jacket, or mug...

Best,
Andrew